.........:::::::Kathryn Doan::::::::::...............
My sister Kathryn is the best sister in the world.Kathryn is nice, funny, and crazy at times but I still love her. We don't get along much but she's almost my favorite sister haha! We fight alot but we still get along and have alot of things in common. She's my only sister that hasn't moved out yet. I miss all my other sisters but I hang out with her the most. She may be the meanest but she sometimes is the nicest. Even though we really box fight and hit each other, couple minutes later we would be the best sisters in the world. even though she's the craziest haha, and the meanest but she is the best sister in the whole wide world.
posted by gd at
9:45 AM
4 Comments:
Good! Make sure kathryn reads it, and if it makes her cry, you get extra points!
You didn't capitalize "Even" or put any commas before but....,but the rest is great.
Okay this is what I think. You should't have wrote "sister" so much and when you said "other sisters that moved away" you should do this ( Name,Name, and Name ).
That was pretty good! But, even didn't get capitalized, and you needed some commas in some areas, but other than that it was great!!!
AG
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